The writing process is almost over. We have completed our rough drafts and are not beginning to revise them. The first step we have to take is seeing whether or not our voice is heard but not to loud in the essay. We had to go over our highlighter with two highlighters and highlight our voice with one, and the sources voice with another. This let us clearly see where we needed to work. When we were finished, we were asked to answer the following questions about who's voice dominated more.
What voice dominates?
They were
both about even. The author’s voice was a little bit stronger in places than my
own but for the most part, they were about evenly split.
Are you turning over too much of
the text to your sources?
I think that personally I could have used my voice a
little bit more than what I did. Even
though they were fairly evenly matched, in some places, it did sound like I was
just repeating the sources.
Are you ignoring them and rattling
on too much about what you think?
I don’t think I am rattling on too much.
Or does you source use seem
appropriate to support your purpose?
I feel that the amount of factual
information and personal opinion meshed together well.
What do you notice about the pattern
of your color?
The colors seemed to go back and forth a lot during the course
of the paper.
Are you taking turns paragraph by paragraph
with your sources or is your own analysis and commentary nicely blended within
paragraphs?
From the looks of it, my own voice is blended within the paragraph.
Do you surround quoted passages
with your own voice and analysis?
For the most part, inserted quotes are surrounded
by my own thoughts. There are some that I either start a quote with my voice
but don’t end with it.
Who wins the wrestling match?
It
was a long hard struggle, but in the end, the sources won.
Bri, I think that you are doing great in your essay writing process! I really like that you are able to recognize the balance that is occurring in your paper between your ideas and the sources' ideas. I think that by what your saying that you see that you need to add more of your voice but the conversation between the two different voices is working well together
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